Inner Sanctum

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Inner Sanctum

The Frankenstein inside,
that lurks,
the beast of Hyde
you cant deny
nor hide away.
The place that darkness
lays
and inner crimson that life
has stained,
the lunacy that
screams from the brain.
Straight Jacket the mind,
your thoughts dont lie.
You know,
the face, the image,
those you picture
and hope will die.

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shallenemcgrath commented on Inner Sanctum

01-02-2011

The ending is kinda cheesy but I like the idea that you are writing about your inner landscape in terms of the Munsters. How John Waters of you. But the opening line, that you are Frankenstein inside, carries a lot of weight. Mary Shelley's subtitle for the book was Prometheus Revisited. Prometheus was a titan in Greek mythology. He was the champion of mankind. He was punished by Zeus for bring fire to man. Zeus had him push a rock up hill for all eternity while an eagle ate his liver. (kinda gross- but I'm sure the punishment was effective). The name "Hyde" is ripe for a double entendre and yet you do not capitalize on that. If you wanted to illustrate macabre insanity Renfield (the faithful side-kick of Dracula) would have been great. I would love to see the idea expanded, rewritten, and more references to the monsters -there are so many worth mentioning. You may already know this but Frankenstein was conceived by Ms. Shelley while she was in the presence of two of the world's most renowned poet's her husband Percy and Lord Byron. The idea was to write about the spark of life... indeed... what makes us human instead of inanimate. In that way Frankenstein is more profound than the mere seduction of Dracula. Please send me a PM if and when you make a second attempt at this.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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