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    Instrument

     

    Let your feelings flow
    release onto me
    to feel your truth
    I want to believe

    Like the tip of a knife
    channel it all
    then stab through me 
    so the notes may fall

    Give me your joy
    with sounds of pleasure
    Give me your sadness
    and create their treasure

    A melodic whisper
    from a smiling face
    A tightened chord
    with a quickened pace

    I found this soul
    beneath the pain
    The river swells
    from the falling rain

    Let your feelings flow
    release onto me
    to feel your truth
    I want to believe

     

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    tenderpoison commented on Instrument

    01-20-2011

    I like the way you used the same stanza for first and last - as though your thoughts made a completed circle, encompassing all you wanted to say. as you know, I love the metaphor as well - 10
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    rsalassi commented on Instrument

    07-18-2010

    Have revisited this. All I can say is, where the fuck did I come up with that sinking Titanic shit, except the dedication involved on the band's part. I suppose. I get easily influenced by something that sticks with me all night and applies to absolutely nothing I read or experience from that moment on., but I can't shake it, nonetheless. The music video I just heard in your The Band Played On, for example. It's still in my head. Haunting, ya see?
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    Artie

    07/18/2010

    Haaaaa!! Don't feel too bad, I actually thought that the Titanic image was awesome!! Writing for me is a fun thing, even when the final works are depressing lol. I enjoy and welcome all opinions. Thanks for reading

    rsalassi commented on Instrument

    07-07-2010

    While reading this, all that came to my mind was the band playing on as the Titanic steadily filled with water. Don't ask me why; I don't know. So, play on, friend, play on. You'll get the tune down sooner or later.
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    Artie

    07/18/2010

    So reading my work reminds you of the sinking of the Titanic?? LOL- Hmmmm - Ok I'll spin this shit into gold lol- the dedication required to learn to play an instrument, to write a song, and to perform that song is amazing. Equal to the dedication of the band playing on the sinking ship. Thx for taking the time to read my work - Latrz

    Hampton commented on Instrument

    07-06-2010

    A beautiful and thought provoking look into the soul of that instrument we call life.....................Hampton
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    Artie

    07/18/2010

    I'm glad you enjoyed this. Thx for taking the time to read my work - Latrz

    Rhymer commented on Instrument

    06-16-2010

    This poem had me from the opening stanza. This section spoke volumes to me, my soul had to be uncovered throught the pain and I can only thank God that people can care enough to look beyond the surface "I found this soul beneath the pain The river swells from the falling rain" Another excellent write my friend.
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    Artie

    07/18/2010

    Thanks so much! I'm glad you were able to relate to this.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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