Intuitive Spirit

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March Poetry Survivor week 3 and final submission

Intuitive Spirit

There is a stranger in the woods, cloaked by the brush
He watches as I ponder the meaning of life
From my terrace, wonder draws from my cigarette
Intuitively, I know he longs to guide me

The earthly stranger does not make his presence known
And the moon in concert hides behind the dark clouds
So not to blow his cover by the glow, but in vain
For, intuitively I feel his presence

A chill runs down my spine causing me to shiver
The soft hairs that make me human stand in gesture
And my heart stops for a moment, though not in fear
For intuitively I know his source is pure

Born of angelic cloth, a sole purpose to guide
Though alone and estranged by my ignorance
Silent, watching my ruination in the cold
Intuitively, he has known my pain

The rain falls now to offer enlightenment
And shields my heartfelt tears, for now I am ready
After long separation, we will unite in spirit
Intuitively, I call out to him by name

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ginga commented on Intuitive Spirit

04-01-2010

Dawn, A splendid poem that soul searches, and find a companion in the process. This poem has the illusion of mystery and calm. ginga

Artie commented on Intuitive Spirit

04-01-2010

I like how you show the fear of the unknown. This is a mysterious write, that starts off dark, and brightens with each line. Well done - 10 from me

dawnjyc

04/01/2010

Thank you so much!

dahlusion commented on Intuitive Spirit

03-31-2010

My belief is: the only meaning to life is to live it. "The rain falls now to offer enlightenment And shields my heartfelt tears, for now I am ready" — this is poetically gorgeous! Your are enlightened, yes, you are. Bravo!!

dawnjyc

04/01/2010

Dah, thank you so much. I am always excited to see you stop by and comment.

BikemanRJ commented on Intuitive Spirit

03-30-2010

Neat title and the thyme is very thought provoking. The moon hiding behind the clouds to not blow his cover very mystical. Yet you will unite in spirit so that he can guide you interesting read. God Bless BikemanRJ

dawnjyc

04/01/2010

thank you

Doshima commented on Intuitive Spirit

03-30-2010

A vey philosophical poem which can be felt more by experience. Nature had been woven sagaciosly.

dawnjyc

04/01/2010

Thank you!

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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