Last Breath

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    • stormimartin
    • Wow it's been a long time since I've visited my account they've changed everything! I need to get back into my groove of writing just been so busy being a new Mommy!!!

    Last Breath



    Laying awake feeling like I'm dreaming. Inside my whole body is screaming.

    Hating you more and more each day. Doing all I can, what else can I say.

    Can't stand to be with you, can't stand to be without you. You like a drug one that will eventually kill you.

    Better off without you and the harm you'd do in the end. All my love and all my pain I have given you. Until you couldn't take anymore.

    I take a deep breath trying not to scream. You standing there expressionless saying "what do you mean?"

    Feeling my tempature rising, wondering how all this could be so suprising.

    I've loved you endlessly and this is my payback. You will your lips pressed against another woman.

    Why didn't you just take a knife stab me in the heart and watch me take my last breath.

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    Weatherstone commented on Last Breath

    04-08-2009

    I feel your venting here! But the language, form, and flow could be more focused to bring the reader in to the conflict and make him/her a part of it.

    organicchick commented on Last Breath

    04-01-2009

    Wow, there is no doubt what you were writing about! Really good expression and that is what poetry is about.

    JaLaw commented on Last Breath

    01-21-2009

    i feel ya pain.

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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    Empty 1
    Your life 5
    Thoughtless Words 3
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