loast in a dream
in the day awakining a lifein the night lost to might
the worlds we see when we fall
in the night dark is all
all we do is get lost in a dream
yet somehow is sweet just like strawberies and wipcream
loast in a dream
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Built with Poem Builder!in the night lost to might
the worlds we see when we fall
in the night dark is all
all we do is get lost in a dream
yet somehow is sweet just like strawberies and wipcream
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Poem Comments
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alb29oclfl commented on loast in a dream
06-12-2010
- nice flow and rhythm in this piece, you have a talent keep wrting
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sawdust commented on loast in a dream
05-11-2010
- you have a gift for expressing a feeling so many have the same thoughts but cant express it dont let any one change the way y0ou think its unique thats what makes your poetry a joy to read
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dahlusion commented on loast in a dream
03-31-2010
- "in the night dark is all all we do is get lost in a dream yet somehow is sweet just like strawberies and wipcream" — this is poetically sound and lovely. Bravo!!
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Musicmynded1 commented on loast in a dream
03-30-2010
- A few misspelled words... but a very nicely written piece of work.
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