lonely me!!!

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    i hope you enjoyed it, bare with me if i made mistakes, cause i wrote it at work in like 5 minutes!

    lonely me!!!

    An empty day has just begun

    Once again the sadness won,

    Once more I feel so lonely

    So blue,

    Just another bloody fool

    Who couldn’t see that hope had died

    Just the other empty night.

     

    A new sad day

    Is here to stay,

    A broken dream, that fades away

    Another scar not on my face

    But on the emotions I embrace,

    Another call, a call to you,

    Another dream too sad, too blue,

    Another dead end just for me,

    I guess I’m cornered,

    No problem though

    I got no place to be

    I got no place to go.

     

    Another night for me and you

    Another darkness for us two

    Another call, a call from you

    A call to say: “I’ve never loved you,

    Never really had reason to,

    You took away the best of me

    But now you get the rest of me

    The broken parts, the hate, the roar

    The staring at a closing door

    The best was never much you see

    That’s why you only get the rest of me”.

     

     

     

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    Rygar commented on lonely me!!!

    10-13-2009

    very nicely written, its dark and sad and i love it!

    dumplin commented on lonely me!!!

    10-13-2009

    I know from whence you come. Please read "It's Enough" on my profile. You will see, you are not alone.

    bforibus commented on lonely me!!!

    10-12-2009

    i love the rhythm of this poem. it made the emotion of sadness so elegant and so sincere. wonderfully made.

    jademelissa74 commented on lonely me!!!

    10-08-2009

    True sadness fill the lines within this poem. You wrote this piece passionately. Good job!

    Hampton commented on lonely me!!!

    10-08-2009

    A rather sorrowful write...the result of a bad relationship I would assume. You write well. Keep it up your poems will never desert you.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

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