Lonely seashell

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    Lonely seashell

    Im a seashell
    With chestnut stripes
    White swirls
    Blue spirals
    Burgandy lines
    I know soon
    I will be found
    Placed on a mantle
    Or old table
    people will forget
    the beauty i pocess
    Im a lonely seashell
    I miss my freinds
    The Flourscent coral
    the special seaweed
    That spoke to me
    Goodbye to the velvet sands
    where someone found me....


     

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    fluffybunniezz commented on Lonely seashell

    10-20-2012

    This was beautifully written, the wording was very nice, the form was well executed, and this poem is just all around amazing! My only bit of constructive criticism would be to add some punctuation to help with the flow of it.

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