Loney Vampire

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i wrote this last year when i was in love with a man that worked so hard....

Loney Vampire

with all the people around
you'd think i wasn't so alone
inside
the heaviness of my thy heart
which lay in thy breast
all the noise and confusion
thou'd think thy wasn't happy
but the feelings are so
complexed it's hard to say
which is best
and thou would think
the chill in the air
would keep thy skin cold
but the sun beams
brightly as i sit
by this river
and await
the sun's nobel power
to turn me to ash
which i all but deserve
no, maybe not deserve
but need
so this vampire may
finally rest....in peace

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dumplin commented on Loney Vampire

11-03-2009

what's with all the thy's? you know that means your, right? Thou is you and thy is your. When I read it without all of that, it is a lovely poem.

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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