Loss

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    I wrote this one back in 1994 when i was going thhrough a lot of personal battles; demons from my past that I couldn't seem to shake were constantly making me feel like there was only one way out. Instead, I decided to put my pain to paper and tried to deal with ito the best of my human ability. I have changed a few words from the original script, making it flow a little better. I hope everyone reading this can somehow relate to it, or maybe even take heart that things can always be worse if you let them.

    Loss

     Winning and losing is all my life is.
    Coming to conclusions that life's not worth piss.
    Savouring victory, feeling like a king.
    Never knowing that heartache is the very next thing.

    I have things offered and take them with thanks,
    not realizing the devil is still up to his pranks.
    I beg and I plead, I pray and I demand,
    but I sit here and wonder if God's dealt me my hand.

    Love seems so fleeting to people today;
    if something doesn't suit you, just chuck it away.
    Lovers and friends are few and far between,
    and even when you find them they can be fucking mean.

    It pains me to think that love I will never see,
    to leave me content and never again lonely.
    A loving wife and family to fill me with pride;
    a soulmate to ride with at night by my side.

    Seeing life's perspectives through sad, vacant eyes;
    waiting for the day of my heart's last demise.
    Loss is a word I know a lot about.
    Soon heartache will win, and my soul will give out.


    B Heath Harris/(c) 2009 

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    BrokenHeart2009 commented on Loss

    09-08-2010

    A poem of hopelessness and vacany. I know it sounds off to use vacancy, however it feel like their is a vacany in your heart. A room needed to be filled with someone who is true. However, the rooms you have given to loved one had been filled with disappointment and heartache. I think this poem is written very well and the tone is loss.
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    raziel69

    09/08/2010

    thanks, i wrote this one at a time when loss was my life, but i have since filled all of those voids with the love that i thought i had lost. thanks for stopping by, i appreciate the comment...Raz

    Artie commented on Loss

    06-17-2009

    I can really connect with this (unfortunately lol). Today it seems like everyone has this buffet style love life (a little of this, a little of that), taking the bits and pieces they like, and ditching the rest. Then these same people have the nerve to wonder why they're so unhappy. The motto of today's society is "Be the cause of your own pain, and it won't be as bad." Well it's not true. Ok I'll get off my soapbox now, very well written. An important piece for people to hear. 10 from me my friend.
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    raziel69

    06/17/2009

    thanks again, i really appreciate it. this one was written during the time in my life where i was so overwhelmed with what i wanted, who i wanted, why, and how. i agree with everything you said, and there is no reason why people should have to try to deal with pain just to survive life when things can be so much easier if you just allow yourself to see the real side of a person before you jump in. thanks again, my friend.

    raziel69

    06/17/2009

    thanks again, i really appreciate it. this one was written during the time in my life where i was so overwhelmed with what i wanted, who i wanted, why, and how. i agree with everything you said, and there is no reason why people should have to try to deal with pain just to survive life when things can be so much easier if you just allow yourself to see the real side of a person before you jump in. thanks again, my friend.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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