love at first site

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love at first site

i saw him at school the first day
in my head i knew i wantted to say hey
i looked at that guy
From across the hall
he asked me if i wanted to go to the mall
i knew he was the one
I went home and got dressed
i knew i needed some rest
but i just wantted to be with this man of my dreams
So the next day when i got up
i went to school thats when i saw his face again
i wanted to go over there and say hi but i was way to shy
so i went to my friend and started to cryu
she said dont be sad get glad
we had a good laugh out of that one but i wasn't to satisfied when
He went to me and my friend and said
will you go with me right in front of me
i just turned and walked away drowning myself into tears
my friend ran up and said she said no
i said go and tell him i said i would love to
so she did and he said let me see....
she told me to talk to him and then we would meet down by the old oak tree
i said ok then went and he said hey babe
i looked at him with a strange look and he said
Will u love me forever and never let me go
Yes you are my love you are all i ever think about
and he picked me up and ran down the hill and triped over a tree stump and we fell and rolled down u
he picked me up and carried me off. we sat on a bench and
that was when he kissed me my face turned bright red
that was my first kiss even though it wasn't on the lips i still loved it then he invited me to his
house, he reached down and grabbed my,
hand and said you are the only girl i have kissed and now held hands with
and we walked till three in the morning telling eachother everything about us
i was so surprised when i found his deepest darkest secret was
that his best friend almost killed him when they were 5
and i didnt know what to say so i told him my deapest darkest secret
I was scared that he would laugh when i found out i was bi.... but he didn't he said
i love you and you love me so lets just forget about that
so he grabed my hand and took me to his favorite place in the world
It is a creek that is special to him. it was the first place were he
saw me i thought that was so speacil
so we had a picnic and stayed awhile
Then he drove me home in his big truck
and i invited him in to meat my parents... i didn't know how to tell my parents that i was dateing h
im they said that if he broke my heart it would be my fault
and i told my parents nothing like that would ever happen
They said they didn't care and i needed to get a life
so the next day his parents and my parents met and had lunch together
it went asome they all got along and talked hour affter hour... then came the baby pictures....
i saw them and cried
when he was a little baby he had curly hair he was so cute
i laughed a couple of him and he laughed at some of mine too
some were embarassing and some were not
some were cute and some were interesting

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jessicanichole8 commented on love at first site

11-04-2010

i love our poem buddy it is cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

babygirl4028

11/04/2010

ikr?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!? ily buddy!!!!!!!!! (:

MJG956 commented on love at first site

05-30-2010

Poems should make one think deep,as this one obviously does. Good poem! I dated my wife for six months,before carefully deciding on popping the question. I thought for about a second or two and decided it was the most logical thing in life,that I could ever wish to do. Great poem!

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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