Lovely Smile

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  • Happiness
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  • Love

    Poem Commentary

    I'm talking about my husband.  He has one of those smiles that melts your heart.  It sprinkles sunshine on each person he meets.

    Lovely Smile

    When you look at me and smile

    It warms my heart for a long while


    It makes me weak in the knees

    And makes me beg you please oh please


    It fills me with happiness and pure joy

    It makes me yell oh boy oh boy


    I love your smile, it lights up the world 

    It’s like sprinkles of sunshine twirled and twirled

     
    And for now as you can probably see

    Your smile means so much to me

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    ALPink commented on Lovely Smile

    07-30-2009

    this is so awesome. its nice that you write about your loved ones and the positive effects they have on you

    naushad commented on Lovely Smile

    07-30-2009

    it is a very simple and nice poem. the expression is straight. keep on doing good work.

    1Love commented on Lovely Smile

    07-30-2009

    Another great poem. I loved it very much. Made me smile.

    tygseflrpdme commented on Lovely Smile

    07-30-2009

    Light-hearted and real. Good effort at rhymed couplets. The meter is a little rough.

    MonkeyLover

    07/30/2009

    I really dont know much about the technical aspects will you explain what you mean by rough meter.

    1990lh commented on Lovely Smile

    07-29-2009

    a very beauitful and loving poem i really enjoyed it

    MonkeyLover

    07/30/2009

    Thank you so much.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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