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this was written as two different pieces and each one reads independent... but mashed together they read as one story...


a break in the clouds reveals an eerie glow
the moon shatters the darkness of the night
as the clouds part to show their respect

     in the darkness of a room
     a shadow moves
     bathed in the moonlight
     shining through a barred window
     eyes cast in the color of evil

the wind gives life to the motionless trees
animating their exaggerated arms
marionettes on invisible strings

     the moon brings the night to life
     horror stalks the living earth
     a screaming howl
     rips through the air and
     the night recoils

a whisper of fear dances across the wind
the world cautious of the threat
hides the moon behind sheets of grey

     a silhouette cast unto the dark
     an abomination to the light
     a beast of man stalks
     with dreaded hunger
     as the moon cowers in the sky

within the wind the cries of the damned
rustle like dried leaves on dead limbs
silent echoes carried through nothingness

     relentless throughout the night
     fearless in its course
     compelled by instinct
     necessity and desire
     driven by the allure of the moon



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MarionYost commented on luna~tic


well, I was gonna say I love the eerie-ness but since Ken stole my line I'll just say, when you write "dark poetry" You leave your readers hungry for more. awesome write. all the best -Marion-



thanks for the compliment marion it is much appriciated

knight4696 commented on luna~tic


Dano - Another dark masterpiece pal! I love the eerie feel of this poem .. so right for the season and my favorite holiday! :) Great job! :) Ken



masterpiece... hmmm... not sure about that but thanks for taking the time to read and comment

AFIRIQUE commented on luna~tic


Dano goes aloft with the moon. Fine poetry. Exceptional wordsmithing !!



i love the moon and the power it holds

Chaos128 commented on luna~tic


Ha ha You sure you never wrote screenplays for Hammer Studios?



i wish... maybe someone will take notice and ask for my imput

Musicmynded1 commented on luna~tic


I like em together... ur right.. perfect piece for an October amongst us.



thank you

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

Dano’s Poems (150)

Title Comments
Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7