Makai

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okay, so this song is about my ex-neighbors son, who died (he drowned) before we knew them, when they lived in indiana. his family loves him and misses him, but they are glad hes in a better place! i like to imagine that makai watches over his family and sends tehm lots of sunshine :) hey 'kai! your family sends all ttheir love and wishes, ad they miss you something fierce! cant wait to meet u bud! ~ malllie

Makai

Just a loved little boy,
oh so young
Your song had been written,
had yet to be sung. 
Your mother,
your father,
your brothers too,
they live with the guilt of missing you.
Gone off to heaven,
you sprout angel wings.
You sing and you fly,
and you do happy things.
Back here on earth,
your family mourns
for all of the things they could have done more.
Your father,
he laughs, to hide his pain.
Your mother,
she hangs her head in shame.
Your brothers,
they fear they shouldve watched you,
done something, anything,
that they didn't do
Its been five years since you drowned,
your family is gone,
they've left town.
Those people,
we are glad to call friends,
neighbors, companions, a few hands to lend.
And even though I never knew you,
We've done so much,
to help them through
Makai, such a wonderful, young little boy,
you brought everyone 'round you such great joy.
The four short years you spent here on earth,
the pain of loss,that time was worth.
I LOVE YOU MAKAI ANTHONY DRONET!

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brokenhearted11 commented on Makai

08-08-2010

oops! in the description i said song, i mean poem :D thats all i guess . mmmmk thanks

SweetAngel4eva commented on Makai

07-12-2010

I can really relate to this poem because i had a little cousin drown right in front of me when i was younger. we all miss him very much. This poem finds its way into your heart easily. I love this one.

brokenhearted11

07/12/2010

thanks :)

heatheramy5 commented on Makai

07-11-2010

very touching.. my uncle drowned not to long ago. kinda missing all my family that has gone on to be with the Lord.

brokenhearted11

07/11/2010

yeah. thanks :)

lonewolf commented on Makai

07-11-2010

Awesome!!! to write this for someone you never met, with such love and compassion..... amazing!!!!!!

brokenhearted11

07/11/2010

thanks! :)

labitch commented on Makai

07-09-2010

WOW..well done..even for an adult!!! keep writing...u have talent!!!

brokenhearted11

07/09/2010

thanks :) like i always say, im either 4,12,20,45, or 70. it depends. in th8is one im preeeeetty sure i was 70. or 4. either way, thansk :)

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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