Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
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Beware the power of MOM ...Lance proceeded toward the door ~
He had to know what it concealed, What secrets did it hold?
He knew that it must hold something extremely powerful.
He recalled the force he felt ~
There had to be something to it, he felt it in his soul,
It’s strength was overwhelming – like some strong magnetic pull.
~ ~ M ~ ~
He was just a few steps away ~ ‘
When he felt the electricity pulsing through his being.
Felt like a battery was being pressed to his tongue.
His hair was standing on end ~
He was mesmerized – didn’t believe what he was seeing,
Sparks flew from his fingertips, like lasers from a gun.
~ ~ O ~ ~
Stone appeared from out of nowhere ~
Lance was unaware that Stone was standing right behind him,
Until he felt his icy hand placed upon his shoulder.
Startled, but still determined ~
Lance quickly grabbed the doorknob, swinging it wide open.
Sparks shot out across the ceiling and the air grew colder.
~ ~ M ~ ~
A blue mist filled the hallway ~
It was so thick, it impaired his vision, and he couldn’t see,
He could only feel the extreme cold and something pulling.
Lance felt Stone pushing at him ~
With such force that Stone lost his footing and fell to his knees,
Making Lance lose his grip and he too started falling.
~ ~ O ~ ~
Lance held onto the doorknob ~
Gripping it tightly in his hand to help prevent his fall.
While his legs flailed in the air – being sucked in through the door.
That’s when he saw Stone smiling ~
He had gotten up and was now above him, standing tall.
Stone said, “Lance, Give Up You Fool! You Can’t Escape MOM’s allure!”.
~ ~ M ~ ~
Lance continued to fight back ~
He could feel his fingers slipping, as they began to crack,
He knew he could not hold on for very much longer.
Stone enjoyed watching Lance fight ~
He grinned and let out a loud and long victorious laugh;
As the magnetic force became more powerful, stronger.
~ ~ O ~ ~
Lance screamed as his fingers ripped ~
~ ~ M ~ ~
To be continued …
KjK012611
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thecross commented on Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
02-02-2011
- Don't defy your MOM Lance "Give Up You Fool!" my commentary is awesome and off to the conclusion I go whilst I frolic amongst the daisies
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02/13/2011
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Rhymer commented on Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
01-30-2011
- You have ne hooked, I was from the beginning. Always leave the reader on a cliff I go to read the others 10
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02/13/2011
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Olan01 commented on Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
01-27-2011
- Another good chapter in your story so I wait for the next to come our way. Olan.
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02/13/2011
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MindNumbing commented on Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
01-27-2011
- You've always been one of my favorite storytellers here on OP, Ken. The talent you have for suspense is outstanding. Now hurry up with part 6... I cant take it much longer ;)
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02/13/2011
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ginga commented on Members Only .. Part Five "dis-Member-ment"
01-26-2011
- knight, My sebses are heightened with the suspense awaiting ...excellent syory and you know when to leave the reader hanging. ginga
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02/13/2011
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