Mental Rap

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Not sure what's going on between me and James...So quiet...

Mental Rap

Sometimes I just have to let go.
Turn my iPod on to the last note.

Let anger out at the innocent.
Because the strangers never comforted.

I'd like to know what you saw.
The confided side you've seen in me.
Pretend I'm dizzy, roof-top falling
instead of climbing six foot trees.

Let it all out, let me try out.
Coping skills for the insane.
Screaming silently, while comforting,
those in much more pain.

Strangulation amidst passion.
I'm a stumble made into stepping stones.
I can't tell if I'm surrounded,
or if I'm walking sidewalks alone.

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DeepEclipse commented on Mental Rap

06-30-2010

[Let anger out at the innocent. Because the strangers never comforted.] - Ain't this the truth. Life never gives you a break so you have to take one. Wrong place wrong time. [Screaming silently, while comforting, those in much more pain.] - like juggling a double sided coin. Being the savior but rarely getting saved. Clever worded lines in this piece. Using few words to paint a big picture.

AlysonAlive

06/30/2010

Thank you. [: You understand it so well.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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