Mom

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    Mom

    Mom

    What did I miss?

    Your logic is amiss

    I am tiered of this shit

    You take another hit

    Do you think it cool?

    Can you not live without it?

    And your tools

    You’re a fool

     

    I am scared for your life

    You blow me off and say it’s alright.

    Your sick and twisted games

     I will not pay again

     

    Mom I love you

    Stop playing with my head again

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    Photojan12 commented on Mom

    08-29-2010

    As a mother, I understand this. Mother daughter relationships are complicated and difficult at times. I feel this is more of a release than a poem but keep writing and gaining perspective.
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    bloomingsun commented on Mom

    08-27-2010

    This is good, you are processing deep issues with your words. I have lots of old poems along these lines dealing with my dad when I was 16-30 or so. It helps to get it down on paper doesn't it? For me if I can get it to complete in a poem, sometimes it is like I can move on and look forward. Keep writing! :-)
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    BrittKun

    08/29/2010

    I will. Sometimes things happen and they hurt so bad.... I sorry I had a great loss this Friday and I will probbly be writing more poems soon. I was trying to get into brighter poetry. Thanks for your support Britt

    ansari commented on Mom

    08-27-2010

    You started with strong emotion, but ended with love. I am glad you said ' Mom I love you' . I know you've got over with your Mom . Hope you'll have time to read some of mine. Thank you.
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    BrittKun

    08/29/2010

    I was sturggling with my emotions and was feeling lots of anger and then pain and I knew if my mom died I would be a broken wreck so I knew I loved her, even if she isnt a perfect person. But i am not going to be her puppet either. so I will stay in contact but I will never live with her again.I cant be put through it. Thanks for your support Britt Ps I'll see some of yours soon

    pocketofdreams6 commented on Mom

    08-27-2010

    I can tell you are still a young writer... The message came from a deep place, but I think it would have been better if you would have focused more on that deep place, and not so much on rhymes. You have potential to be a great writer some day, just keep on writing! :)
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    BrittKun

    08/29/2010

    Aww, that touches my heart pocketofdreams6!!! It is getting easier to express myself and feelings through writing and talking a like. Ill tell you i use to be very anti-social person because i was not exposed to children my age. But I learn pretty fast And am finally coming out of my shell as a college freshman. thanks for your support and time Britt

    Vampire commented on Mom

    08-26-2010

    without light we do not know darkness. without darkness we cannot know light. from darker aspects in life it will become brighter and get better. great write
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    BrittKun

    08/29/2010

    Yeah definitely. Seeing the world in a different light I needed to move on and I have. I can't worry about her problems anymore but take them as a grain of salt. Thanks for your support Britt

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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