Moose Obituary

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    Moose Obituary

     Few knew of his life:
    few knew of his death.
    a bull moose, probably
    less than three years old,
    drowned
    he struggled for hours
    til at last he gave up
    his younger weak legs
    sunk deep
    he could not keep
    his head up
    no one could save him
    nature can be cruel

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    RHPeat commented on Moose Obituary

    06-26-2010

    Does anyone ever need to be told this: (nature can be cruel). This line is not needed for the poem to tell its story. And I dare say the poem would be far stronger without it. That conclusion is the reader's epiphany. And now they won't have because there is no revelation left for them to have. I like your intent nonetheless. A poet friend// RH Peat
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    sugdorz commented on Moose Obituary

    06-14-2010

    simple yet leaves you thinking. I'm not sure why but not having much punctuation works for this.
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    ginga commented on Moose Obituary

    06-13-2010

    earthly, A sad site indeed. He will return to the earth and recycle and be reborn as another. ty for your peaceful annnouncement. ginga
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    earthly

    06/13/2010

    I know that he will, but it truly was an experience I wish I had not witnessed-the Conservation officer that finally responded after the young died said 'nature was taking its course' I still wish i could've done more-Namaste...Earthly

    Charlie23 commented on Moose Obituary

    06-08-2010

    An obituary for a moose with no name actually makes me kinda sad. I wouldn't be able to stop crying if I saw an animal struggling only to die...
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    earthly

    06/08/2010

    My husband and I did what we could-took turns staying with it (may sound funny, but I even tried to console it)-I called local conservation office and was told that "nature will just run its course" -I did cry-I tried many times to write a poem about, and finally, this what I came up with, but there is so much more unsaid-I dreamnt that night that the moose was calling for help-it truly was traumatic for me as I love to watch moose-it was exciting to see him at first, unti I realized his predicament-TY for reading and commenting friend-Namaste...Earthly

    jtlove commented on Moose Obituary

    06-07-2010

    I was thinking about a little poem about otters.Otters are so cute. Mooses are cool too.Good job.
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