MUD ON MY SHOES

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MUD ON MY SHOES

flowers bloom
and flowers die
just like us
with a tear-stained eye
sailboats sail
and seagulls soar
ships sink down
to the ocean floor
laughter comes
and sorrows go
the moon lights up
the sky’s flashy show
spring blows in
and breezes sigh
i’d feel your love
but i’d get to high
i walk the path
but i sing the blues
the ground is dry
but there’s mud on my shoes
i dance alone
but to hopes i cling
there are no birds
but i hear them sing

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mdpoetgirl commented on MUD ON MY SHOES

06-01-2009

I like this poem too. Favorite lines are: "there are no birds, but i hear them sing." Nice to end a poem with a hopeful feeling... i've read a lot of sad poems that end sad and gloomy, but i like it when poets turn it around at the end and leave a hint of optimism... and even though these lines are kind of gloomy, i love how you put it: "i walk the path, but i sing the blues, the ground is dry, but there's mud on my shoes." Brilliant way to describe someone who's feeling a little down. Very inte

Stark commented on MUD ON MY SHOES

04-21-2009

Another nice one. I like how you play with opposites, and of course the images you use. I think my favorite bit was "I walk the path/ but I sing the blues/ the ground is dry/ but there's mud on my shoes"...I could definitely imagine someone singing that. Your poems always have a great natural rhythm.

Madelynn commented on MUD ON MY SHOES

04-09-2009

Oh ,I really enjoyed this one!Nice rhythm to it.The metaphore is awsome.Alot of days I feel like I have mud on my shoes too.This really is a poem of hope,isnt it?Like the old saying- 'This to shall pass.'But I like the way you say it better!thanks

jonkers commented on MUD ON MY SHOES

04-09-2009

i very much liked the ending the way u put it was great

sk commented on MUD ON MY SHOES

04-08-2009

What a wonderful and hopeful poem! I especially like the last two lines..a 10!

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

organicchick’s Poems (28)

Title Comments
Title Comments
THE WEDDING OF NEVER 12
ENDING 7
DISTORTED 9
HUMAN 8
CLAWING 9
MOTH EATEN MEMORIES 5
THE MORE YOU LOVE 4
SUBTLE ARE THE SIGNS 5
SHE'S LIKE SPRING 3
MUD ON MY SHOES 5
JUST CALL ME PAIN 9
FAIRY TALE TOLD 3
BITTERNESS 2
LIFE 6
SEED OF LIFE 6
SECOND LOOK 4
ICICLES 6
LOVE DAD 3
HANGING ON 4
PROOF 2
HOLD ME DEAR 2
GOSSIP 1
BROKEN WING 3
A LITTLE LOVE. 4
Your Fix. 2
A New Season 3
The mirror 6
The lovely flower. 6