My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

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This is a true story about my cousin,lol...see what i get up to when bored...Her response..." I always wanted someone to write a poem for me and no one ever has...Finally someone does,and its not someone I am in love with, or even a guy,but rather my female cousin and this is what i get? LOVE IT!!! "I was relieved to know we both share the same kind of humor...watch out you may be my next topic,lol.......

My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

I went to see my doctor

'Cause I was feeling down

Told him all my problems

The things that cause my frown


I thought he could prescribe me

A magic little pill

To make my madness go away

Improve the way I feel



He said he wished to help me

"Go see this specialist

For he knows better what to do

And how to handle this"



He gave me some directions

To a place I'd never been

Told me they're expecting me

So go and walk on in


As I took the lengthy drive

And started to get near

The directions he had given me

Got more and more unclear


I drove on down the road

And to my left and right

Were medical facilities

That went on out of sight


I tried to break the code

Of the writing doc had given

(Hand writing courses should be done

For a doctor to earn his living)


I gazed upon these buildings

When what came into view

A sign that read "Mental Health"

Just up the avenue


The sticky note read avenue

So This must the place

I pulled on in and parked my car

With frustration on my face


I walked up to the nurses desk

And gave a friendly grin

They handed me some paper work

Said "check yourself on in"


Finally I'd get a little help

To get me through the day

Hopefully a few good pills

To chase depression away


I handed back the papers

Yes I was all checked in

Then they walked me down the halls

Through a maze that laid within.


"Where are they taking me"I thought

Something seems not right

Then they put me in a room

And locked the door down tight


"What's going on with this"

I shouted rather loud

A nurse then walked into my room

" Screaming's not allowed"


She gave me a happy pill

That really did the trick

It threw me loopy for some time

A pill that worked so quick


My mind was wildly spinning

As I awoke tucked up in bed

I'd acquired a female roommate

Who was peering from overhead


She was chanting crazy ramblings

That I couldn't understand

While dressed in her nakedness

(surely this is banned)


So I screamed again in horror

For a doctor to let me out

She quickly threw on all her clothes

And I continued to shout


And when a doctor entered

And looked for the naked girl

All he saw was my mental state

which was in a frenzied whirl


I explained this was a huge mistake

My doctor wouldn't send me here

I'd like to check myself back out

I made my position clear


I gave my bunk mate an evil look

As the doc began to say

"You can't just check yourself back out

It doesn't work that way"


"In thirty days we'll evaluate

And if healthy we'll set you free

Until then you should just calm down

Because here is where you'll be"


I tried to break right past him

And flee right at the door

I was tackled by three nurses

And quickly hit the floor


They shoved in me another pill

As much as I tried to fight

Tossed me roughly on my bed

Where I passed out for the night


I awoke late the next morning

And my cell mate was naked again

Back and forth she tread the floor

Begging me to be her friend


She seemed to know the time

When the nurses would come in

Her clothes came on and off

Over, over,and over again


Later in the morning

The nurses had us groom

Declared there was TV for us

In the entertainment room


Happily I volunteered

To go there right away

With hopes of keeping to myself

For the rest of my Saturday


I sat quietly on a couch

Staring at a screen

Longing to be awoken

From this a horrid dream


When my thoughts were interrupted

By a gentle voice

A man had sat beside me

And said "we have no choice"


"They will keep you here my friend

Until you go insane

I can see you are not mad

Although you suffer pain"


He seemed to be so friendly

He knew just what to say

A norm amongst the mental

I'd thought I'd found that day


He talked and talked some more

And I listened to each word

Then all of the sudden

His words became quite slurred


And he told me next in quiet

Where no one else could here

That they give him medications

For his thoughts aren't always clear


And then his voice deepened

and he told me the reason why

He is kept here in confinement

So no one else will die


And then he said "Don't worry

They know just what to do

They'll give me another pill

When I want to murder you"


I jumped up from the couch

And ran straight down the hall

Everyone heard me profess

" I don't belong here at all"


I darted around corners

Through this labyrinth of design

I reach the nurses station

With leaving on my mind


I went to grab her phone

For my doctor I would call

She wasn't gonna let me

But she was very small

 

She tried to overtake me

But I wouldn't let that be

I hit the magic button that

Lets a patient free


The door slid right on open

And as I stood outside

I realized ever quickly

I must find a place to hide


I ran and ran and ran

through buildings I did dart

And finally I took refuge

Inside the doors of Walmart


I needed to use a payphone

But my wallet was in my purse

Taken at the hospital

D*mn that wretched nurse


So I begged from a perfect stranger

to give me a small fund

So I could call the doctor

And see why this he'd done


My doctor answered the call

And before he could even speak

I rambled on and on

My madness at a peak


When he finally interrupted

I dropped the phone to my feet

He said "you went to the wrong place"

Try going across the street.


I said "but Ive broken out

I'm hiding and on the run

You're my doctor now fix it

See what you're scribbling has done"


He apologized so humbly

and said he'd give them a call

And I said "Well I'm not crazy

and I don't want medicine after all"


...and then I found me a new doctor who types...

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yardbird commented on My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

09-30-2010

That is so cool, I've been there done that! Know a few people who have been there too!! Love your poem!!!

kmeadows commented on My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

06-23-2009

This is great, I loved it , it was like reading a story and I was on the edge of my seat, it went from funny, to scary to sad to funny and around and around. Great job, wonderful work!

Kelstorm commented on My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

06-23-2009

This is a good picture of medical science. I love your line about doc's writing skills and last line. What's interesting is that a sane person committed too long to such an institution can become crazy. It's fortunate she escaped before this could take place. As to the writing, you did good. The rhyming added just the needed spell to make this whole thing work.

ladydraeko commented on My Great Escape From THe Mental Ward

06-23-2009

wow, the imagery in this poem is so real, I can imagine the horror and the confusion of the writer. If this is a true story, as I presume it could be I would have been in the same situation and done the same thing. Flow is wonderful and is very well written!!! HUGS!!!!

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