MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

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winterkou recently wwrote a poem called; the coldside of the pillow http://www.originalpoetry.com/the-coldside-of-the-pillow He wrote this from the perspective of the woman leaving. I highly reccomend you read it. I took it in anotther direction and wrote it from the viewpoint that she is dying. Please read both; His first. My viewpoint is from the woman's side as response to his. I hope you enjoy both writes. also I had a sister-in-law pass away at 24 and could imagine this was how it may have been for her.

MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

I laid my head,

Upon that bed.

A bed gone cold.

No longer feeling life’s warm hold.

Or was it the warmth of love;

I missed?

Pulling up the covers,

I offer you;

One last kiss.

Already I feel;

My memory fading.

Within the cool side of the pillow.

Fading like;

That swing hanging,

From the willow.

Alas with all my loved ones,

Gone for the day.

I chose this time to slip away.

Placing pen to paper;

One final time.

 Penning the dreams;

That were mine.

With each teardrop soaking;

Into that pillow.

I could cry no more;

Like that dying weeping willow.

I left you with nothing more;

Not even my fading scent.

Sadly, all my tears are spent. 

I knew our love;

You would miss.

But, I couldn't offer you;

One last kiss.

Now you’ll no longer have;

Me to hold.

Only my tear stained pillow;

Turned cold.

 

 

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Worthless commented on MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

08-24-2011

yeah me to, i agree with winterkou.. well way of putting emotions and feelings into words.. im going to sleep on the floor of a utility truck for an hour or so..i can barely keep my eyes open, just got back from maryland and now headed to Manchester new hampshire with no sleep and i gotta try and get there tommorow night drivin 55 n no toll roads.. nyway, good night. ill talk atcha later

winterkou commented on MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

08-19-2011

You really did a great job with this write. I like where you took this one

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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