MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

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winterkou recently wwrote a poem called; the coldside of the pillow http://www.originalpoetry.com/the-coldside-of-the-pillow He wrote this from the perspective of the woman leaving. I highly reccomend you read it. I took it in anotther direction and wrote it from the viewpoint that she is dying. Please read both; His first. My viewpoint is from the woman's side as response to his. I hope you enjoy both writes. also I had a sister-in-law pass away at 24 and could imagine this was how it may have been for her.

MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

I laid my head,

Upon that bed.

A bed gone cold.

No longer feeling life’s warm hold.

Or was it the warmth of love;

I missed?

Pulling up the covers,

I offer you;

One last kiss.

Already I feel;

My memory fading.

Within the cool side of the pillow.

Fading like;

That swing hanging,

From the willow.

Alas with all my loved ones,

Gone for the day.

I chose this time to slip away.

Placing pen to paper;

One final time.

 Penning the dreams;

That were mine.

With each teardrop soaking;

Into that pillow.

I could cry no more;

Like that dying weeping willow.

I left you with nothing more;

Not even my fading scent.

Sadly, all my tears are spent. 

I knew our love;

You would miss.

But, I couldn't offer you;

One last kiss.

Now you’ll no longer have;

Me to hold.

Only my tear stained pillow;

Turned cold.

 

 

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Worthless commented on MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

08-24-2011

yeah me to, i agree with winterkou.. well way of putting emotions and feelings into words.. im going to sleep on the floor of a utility truck for an hour or so..i can barely keep my eyes open, just got back from maryland and now headed to Manchester new hampshire with no sleep and i gotta try and get there tommorow night drivin 55 n no toll roads.. nyway, good night. ill talk atcha later

winterkou commented on MY SIDE OF THE PILLOW

08-19-2011

You really did a great job with this write. I like where you took this one

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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