next to a bed...

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next to a bed...

 


next to a bed i sit and mourn
tears rip across my skin
as i hold a lifeless hand...

 

the air is heavy and i gasp for breath
the sorrow filling up in my chest


i grind my teeth...


holding my breath i try to breathe
i open my mouth and try to speak
but the words get spun back inside of me

 

next to a bed she sits and mourns
tears rip across her skin
she clings to a lifeless hand...


the air is heavy and she cant catch her breath
the sorrow pressing down on her chest


for her i grind my teeth...


releasing her breath she tries to breathe
she opens her mouth as if to speak
but her words never make it to me


next to a bed i sit with her and mourn
a trail of tears ripped across our skin
holding eachothers hands...

 

the air is heavy but gone is his breath
the last of life escaping his chest


once again i grind my teeth...

 

i hold my breath refusing to breathe
i close my mouth... because i cant speak
my words are trapped inside of me

 

next a bed we sit and mourn
endless tears rip across our skin
we cling to eachothers familiar hands...

 

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susanismith commented on next to a bed...

06-11-2010

Amazing, I can't even try to imagine these thoughts being reality when I know it happens everyday. You paint a clear picture, and I mourn for their lost love. Another written masterpiece.

Dano

06/12/2010

masterpeice?... im not so sure about that... but thank you all the same for reading

Rhymer commented on next to a bed...

05-31-2010

I have sat beside the bed and held the hand of those leaving this life. Your vivd description captures the pain of the loved ones clinging on until the last breath. The death watch is portrayed excellently in this write as only you could have done. 10

Dano

06/01/2010

thanks rhymer

Madelynn commented on next to a bed...

05-31-2010

I can't leave a personal comment on this write- because this piece was very personal for me. I actually had to struggle through the poem. That said, the poem was that powerfully intense to me, and you have written this with nothing less than what you truely are capable of; which is brilliance, Dano. Thank you for sharing such a moving piece of art with us. -Maddi

Dano

06/01/2010

thank you maddi... this one was very difficult to write and still terribly hard for me to read...

Springsize commented on next to a bed...

05-29-2010

Dano, I don't know if this is created or experienced, but you have brought Reader into the room and expressed the feelings of the muted moment... reaching both sides of life. as by holding the hand of one who has just passed from body while holding the hand of one pulses alive, and shares your feelings of memories, loss and clinging each, to the other, for familiarity. Very real feelings here -- reverent and kindly written.

Dano

06/01/2010

thank you for taking the time to read and comment

Teardrops commented on next to a bed...

05-21-2010

How i know what you mean and you discribe it like it really feels you have a truly great poem here . Thanks for letting me rread it Marie

Dano

06/01/2010

thanks for taking the time to read marie... i truly appriciate it

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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Title Comments
from an angels view 19
searching the darkness 10
a letter from santa 14
thanksgiving (acrostic) 12
the depth of... 11
ive wished 7
absentee 12
this is... 13
a journey into the dark 7
the cold of november 14
your voice 12
the yin to the yang 14
twisted 9
autumn 14
i think it happened again 11
luna~tic 19
the darkness 13
a blinding eclipse 16
the universe... 18
the wind of sorrow 14
my sorrow weeps 16
where but the dark... 12
immortal kiss 47
in a darkened room 17
our mother 7
within these flames 12
nocturnal (acrostic) classic rock 7
behind wrought iron bars 25
what i write (part 2) 8
today 17
the world in grey 6
the reality of... 5
in the shadow of a mountain 6
nothing will ever be the same 10
of cemetary dreams (and nightmare scapes) 12
next to a bed... 18
but... 15
at a funeral 12
seventeen (acrostic) 11
the fortunate one(s) 7
what did i do... 24
ashes to dust 45
dancing in the moonlight 14
disempowering the pain 14
the butterfly 10
what i write 14
sorry (i killed the after glow) 11
the humidity rises (an erotic tale) 9
pieces of light 8
the sad pumpkin &... 9
my face 12
for a long time... 14
(an explination of) distractions 6
tell me... 6
the charelston cookie tin 9
silent self destruction 8
exposed 13
the means of the day (a true valentines poem) 2
a poem about nothing... 8
blood bleeds black 7
dissecting myself 3
i will be just fine 3
the stacking of bricks 3
the complexities of depression... 4
spirits & ghosts 3
**random chaos** 2
bloodlust 3
...somethings missing... 2
15 years... 3
beauty sleeps entombed (parts 1 & 2) 3
**untitled** 2
the overstuffed closet 3
the candy dish 2
anxiety speaks 2
**untitled** 2
myself and the light 6
the fog 2
fire and tears 3
cerebral meltdown 3
sometimes i wish... 1
drawing strength from a starr... 2
disappointmen
t...
1
**untitled** 1
the flower garden 3
nature... 1
reaching out 2
the dark and the light... 1
the insistent demon 2
sorry... 3
forgive me lover... (parts 1 & 2) 2
im so sorry... 3
**no title... just random thoughts** 1
to eternity... 2
winter wind whips... 1
tired 2
lucid dream 1
the rains came... 2
the mourning light 1
another jagged pill 1
i just cant... 1
entitlement?!
?!?
1
entitlement!!
!!
1
burning within 4
inside of me 1
projected pain 1
the night... the dakness & the truth? 1
panic 2
the mourning fog 1
when the fires burn 1
through the night 1
shadow casts 0
a mournful rain 1
i cant protect me 2
my comfort place 0
an echo shifts 1
the monster 2
welcome to my life 0
the past is alive... 1
... 1
standing on the edge 2
my smile... 1
anxiety 2
my reality 0
another view... 0
untitled... 0
jagged pill 2
in the dark 1
what to do 1
how can i... 1
life... 3
a crust of pain 1
keeping me weak... 2
my dark world 3
another night of wondering 2
in the attic 4
i hold most dear 2
the me inside of me 2
another day 1
dreamed in a dream 2
a year in the life (dealing with death) 1
i look... 1
where my secrets are kept 1
a mouthful of words 2
i will not fear (when my eyes are blind) 2
i am aware (i'm already dead) 7
standing in the silence of my own shadow... 3
a blinding dark 1
growing pain 3
the longest of nights 5
... 7