night time (a promised poem)

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night time (a promised poem)

this darkness that engulfs us,

silently will we sleep

dancing on strings we cant yet see

twisting and turning on the tips of our feet

floating and passing this is our dream

sadly we follow

we follow every word

we follow every image, sent, sound

this night time we seek

this darkness we dream in

is nothing more than a shadow

nothing more than a image

nothing more than anything at all

this is what we look forward to.

this is what ends our light

and this night time

is what drives us insane

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quickwrite commented on night time (a promised poem)

09-21-2009

This poem uses strong imagery to paint a vivid picture, my favorite kind of work. Nice job, but btw "nothing more than a image" you may want to make "a", "an".

polishprince commented on night time (a promised poem)

09-03-2009

Your title made me curious, just read your poem. I just discovered a singer who write "dark" original songs. His name is Leonard Cohen. He's been around for a long time, but I just came across his stuff recently. I bought one of his final CD's - Live In London... a collection through the stages of his writing and songs. People compare him to Bob Dylan - some say even better. You may want to check him out. "leonard cohen.com" polishprince.

LorettaPurple

09/04/2009

thanks i think i will =)

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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