No pain behind my walls

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This poem was started I scribbled through it and when I went back and saw the page and the words hit me the mark out sure did and does look like an 8.........

No pain behind my walls

Tis,tis,tis...........
                        I see all the pain......
For what did I miss.......
Standing out, in the rain..........


                           I scratched this out at pain.....
Now to return to this page..........
                         That once was left unstained....
The writers wage........!

                               A big 8 right through these words....

            Is now all I can see.....
With in these scribbled words.......
                            Exists only me!

                    Heart mended, wounds healed....
My walls are up to keep pain out......
Love has sealed my soul.....

                           With no doubt!

                 So if I seem distant......
         Far off and adrift......
                      Climb up to where I went....
High upon this cliff....!


                         I have walls around me....
As a mighty guard....
                          Do you have the key?
                       Talk to me softly, not hard.....
                              I need a we!!!!!

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MrGee commented on No pain behind my walls

06-11-2010

Wonderfully written! The rhymn and rhythmn are outstanding in this work and as usual a concise poet which I adore. You also make excellent use of the metaphor. BRAVO! a 10

redbloodink

06/11/2010

ty MrGee ....... you comments are always welcomed and apreciated.... red

Teardrops commented on No pain behind my walls

06-07-2010

Yes my friend one day there will be a we .it is written in the stars Marie

redbloodink

06/08/2010

awe ty Tear once again you said as He has said........... Just a lil more confermation......... red

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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