observations in random rows


  • Lost Love

    Poem Commentary

    just wanted to write a heartbreak poem....getting some old dust out of my heart.

    observations in random rows


    emotion void of devotion
    insidious and indigenous
        this hole is all mine
    her breath on my chest grows cold
    and i hear her footsteps fade
    as i dream

    our lives unfold and fragment
    into pieces
    hitting the ground as the laughter decreases
    i don't want you to leave but you must
    i don't want to cry , but trust
    that most of me will die
    without you

    carefree kisses turned out to be everything but free
    days of sun and sun showers will forever be
    a horrendous tale to relive without thee
    i am in love
    but out of time
    time is never a friend of mine.


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    EyesOfRain commented on observations in random rows


    Beautiful. You captured the emotion well. This makes me sad, and appreciative of what once was. Great poem.



    yeah, this still makes me sad.

    slimgoodwoody commented on observations in random rows


    The term "Carefree Kisses" painted a joyful picture! Great imagery and wordplay!



    thank you for your time. most appreciated, friend.



    "crush" is also "phission".....i write under two names.

    XxairxXxmusicxX commented on observations in random rows


    this is a reakky great poem. it expresses so much.



    thank you. it was a painful time. i will def catch up to reading you as well.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

    Phission’s Poems (24)

    Title Comments
    Title Comments
    hands 1
    freight rain 2
    goodbye 8
    sensual central 1
    goodnight, summer night 3
    the robin 2
    gun 4
    top of the sky 2
    eulogy 2
    do you love me 3
    i lost her 4
    home 2
    observations in random rows 3
    these days 1
    music and dreams 3
    point blank 5
    the gift 2
    breathing love 6
    position 8
    name 5
    one 3
    companion 2
    beware 4
    this ( for annie ) 3