Old Vs. New

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    Wrote this while sitting in parking lot waiting on Sam to get out of class LOL and she helped me with a few lines Enjoy...

    Old Vs. New

     It's Cold
    It's Empty
    It's Unexplored

    I go to take a step out into this unknown
    I retract my motions for my thoughts wander out
    touching,feeling things i can not see

    It's Quiet
    It's Lonely
    It's Terrifying

    I only hear the sounds of my breath
    but I can hear others in my thoughts
    where is this place I have awaken?

    It's Dark
    It's Deserted
    It's Solitude

    The others  sounds I hear are in fact my own
    I'm trapped inside my mind
    in this everlasting existence

    Where is my Light?
    Where is my Warmth?
    Where is my Mind?

    Things seem to fly in different directions
    all i can do is sit and watch in amazement
    as i come to realize i have shed my skin
    and have awaken this new form that i still
    have yet to understand

    I can see the light!
    I feel the warmth!
    I can hear my thoughts clearly!

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    lonewolf commented on Old Vs. New

    01-31-2011

    very impressive. like a snake sheds its skin, you have gone from one person, into becoming another.
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    sammia commented on Old Vs. New

    01-31-2011

    Can't believe that you wrote this while waiting on me to get out of class...It's very good...Keep up the writing...Told you once you opened up your poetic mind there was no going back...Welcome to the poetic side of the world. Sam
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    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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