On The Outside Looking In

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  • Mandi
  • I am here, heart in hand, ready to share time and poems ith anyone who will give me the time in their day.

Poem Commentary

I rewrote this older poem in order to enter it into a contest. Don't hold out much hope, but enjoyed working with it again.

On The Outside Looking In



When you're outside Grandma's house

At her window looking in,

You'd be surprised at what you see

And, the stories you could spin.


All the cousins came to visit Grandma

Mysteriously, stopping one Sunday on a whim,
 
But, anyone could see all the cars in the drive,
     
And watched them leave for home in a tailspin.


Grandma had asked all her grandkids

For a group photo before they said goodbye.

Uncle Jim was taking the picture, he asked

If everyone would give it a solid try.


All the cousins were standing,
                                                                                       
Shoulder to shoulder for the photo shoot.

Short ones stood in the front smiling,

While the tall ones were in the rears,
 
Grinning with bemusement,

Secretly making "bunny ears".
 

All too soon, the children are much older,

And many years have passed.

Someone finds a picture in a box

And finds memories from the past.


That year in the Christmas mailing,

Comes a package from Uncle Jim.

Inside, a photograph with all cousins posing,


And at Grandma's windows, are all the parents,

Noses smashed against the glass

On the Outside Looking In.

 

               MDA

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sammia commented on On The Outside Looking In

02-04-2011

To grandma's house we go...Seems to be where all the happy memories are..Wording flowed good keep writing and sharing

ClearlySays commented on On The Outside Looking In

02-01-2011

An easy flowing read, really loved the imagery of the last two lines.

Mandi

02/02/2011

thank you for your nice comments , they are encouraging to me

Rhymer commented on On The Outside Looking In

01-28-2011

A wonderful walk down memory lane, one so many can relate to..

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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