ONE LAST DANCE....

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Sorry if this one's brutal.  The relationship is also.  There was a time when I was small, she was there only for a moment, then that was all.  Sorry if you can relate.

ONE LAST DANCE....

Out on a dance I ask of you,
So my son can see what you both can do.
So I can have one more dance with dad,
Why, tell me would this be so bad?

Over and over, an excuse you make,
Your scared? or lazy? or have an earache!
Chances to dance are numbered with him,
Any chance for a cure is surely slim.

I am so angry at you,
at times I just don't know what to do!
I feel like you think of no one but yourself. 
How dare you put him up on a shelf!

He is my father, warm, and loving and true,
and has been good to us and to you too.
He needs to have fun with what's left of his life
enough of the stress, pain and strife!

I want good memories to make,
but your fear you cannot shake.
It tears at me, my feelings for you
and the hate makes me feel blue.

I want to fight, and scream and yell!
Sometimes I want you to go to hell.
What kind of mother can't give anything?
Your heart is broken, no music or string.

He loves you I know this
but you; I won't miss
or the conflict and pain of all the years
or all of the slapping or the river of tears.

You are a conundrum for me,
I want so bad to make you see!
I want to explain it honest and true.
But I know no matter what I do
you'll get your way
what can I say?

It's the way you are!
There's just a big old scar
that's ruined your heart
so there's nowhere to start.









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Bettysrainbow48 commented on ONE LAST DANCE....

11-30-2009

THIS POEM SPEAKS A LOT THROUGH THE WORDS USED,ALONG WITH YOUR EXPRESSIONS. I WAS TRULY BLESSED WITH A WONDERFUL FATHER I MISS VERY MUCH HE WAS GOOD TO ME.HE LEFT ME GOOD MEMORIES. YOUR WORK WAS DONE WELL.I WISH EVERYONE COULD HAVE HAD A GOOD FATHER BUT NOT ALL HAVE BEEN LUCKY.I USED TO DANCE ON MY DADS FEET .DADDYS LITTLE GIRL.

Tempestlady

12/06/2009

It's something all little girls love and remember dearly I think. there is a closeness that comes with trusting someone to guide you and teach you. A good Daddy's love is truly for all time. Thanks for reading. Tempestlady

Grito commented on ONE LAST DANCE....

11-15-2009

A painful and tearing rememberance here, a mom that is tough and creates a reign of fear.

Tempestlady

11/21/2009

Maybe one day I will understand her and be able to say I forgive....Write on....

peacefully commented on ONE LAST DANCE....

11-15-2009

This poem is really thought provoking. Sometimes it's hard to write about such personal things and yet the true poet puts it out there, because it is life and true. I am a person that always tries to see things from two sides. I would like to know what the mother was thinking and feeling also. Wonder if you could write about that also.? Maybe you are not able to get into her heart or head, though. It's easier to see the pain she was giving your father. I loved the way you expressed yourself. The flow and heart of this poem was out there. I loved the way you put it to rhyme and the rhythem was great. I could feel the pain you wrote about.

Tempestlady

11/21/2009

I seem to know no other way. What can I say. They are real! If nothing else...they are real...Write on..

LBoogie commented on ONE LAST DANCE....

11-10-2009

Good read, keep up the good work, I want to hear more

Tempestlady

11/15/2009

Posted a new one this weekend. Thanks for you complimentary comments. Write on...

jeanpnkldyg commented on ONE LAST DANCE....

10-14-2009

There is a certain injustice in this world that the best writers have to live the misery they so poignantly write about. Not that others don't, we are just the one's able to live on both sides of the mobius. Thank You so much for commenting on my poem: My Children's Mother, and for this write!....ON !

Tempestlady

11/15/2009

Your words always seem to come from the heart. I have two new ones posted, I was created, and unlawful arnal knowledge-results. Wold appreciate your comments if yo have time. Write on..

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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