Open Your Eyes

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    Thanks koolmom0 hope you like it.........lucky

    Open Your Eyes

     Open your eyes and see me.
    I'm right here where I've always been.
    I'm not the stone stepped over in the road of life.
    But the flower yearning to be noticed.
    I thought you knew me for who I am.

    I spend my time wondering if you feel this heart.
    Remember this faithful love held within.
    My sadness has begun to surface.
    Waiting to be replaced, with the joy I once knew.
    Can you see this pain, look it's quite plain.

    Open your eyes and see me.
    Can't you look upon my tears.
    Can you see this fading love.
    I wonder.
    Will you rescue me.

    Will you rip my soul from this trembling body.
    Shall I replace my love with hatred.
    I wish you could look at me.
    Falling from the edge of glory, just look you'll see.
    Think about these lost dreams we used to talk about.

    Open your eyes and see me.
    Before I wither away, never to return.
    Let your heart fill me again.
    Before its to late.
    Feel my love, my sorrow, my pain.
    Come back to me and we'll fix this life.
    And live once again................

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    BoomShakaLaka commented on Open Your Eyes

    11-04-2009

    pretty sick! it's very relateable, specially when its hard to deal with relationships. im share some way shape or form people can relate to this from any age and gender.
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    lucky62

    11/06/2009

    Some days life just sucks and then the clouds part, money falls from the sky and you remember why you fell in love with her to begin with........

    Ravoya commented on Open Your Eyes

    08-31-2009

    reminds me of a poem i wrote, check it out i think ull like it. "why cant he see?" is the one im after i think
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    lucky62

    08/31/2009

    thanks for understanding my words of wisdom......

    photochick commented on Open Your Eyes

    08-20-2009

    lucky as always your talent shines within your words a beautiful canvas is what you have painted here for us readers great emotion so much depth love this one its my new fav you show the struggles that one goes through perfectly when they wish for the person they love to see the real them wonderful poem lucky 10 for sure
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    lucky62

    08/20/2009

    remind me to cut you your check my dear you make me feel loved

    1990lh commented on Open Your Eyes

    08-20-2009

    nice one lucky i really enjoyed reading it ........
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    lucky62

    08/20/2009

    yep mrgee dropped a good 1st line glad you liked....

    rougepriest commented on Open Your Eyes

    08-20-2009

    nice job lucky, this could easily be a country western song as well. Nice message not overdone like so many. i give it a 10
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    lucky62

    08/20/2009

    thanks rouge I'm glad you liked it

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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