paralyzed

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    never let anyone dictate your life, particularly your lover. try to have your own life apart from theirs because you are still an individual. don't lose "you" in a relationship because if you do, you become a puppet without the life that made special in the first place. this is my opinion, but i stand by it.

    paralyzed





    she approached my puzzle
    and solved me with a smile
    but
    i felt her beating me from the inside out
    and after a awhile
    i was bleeding from the mouth

    i was consumed in her hellfire
    her devils conducted the choir
    and they laughed at my voice

    i swung naked from a tree
    shy and shivering
    privates exposed for all to see
    too guilty to cry
    but too ashamed to open my eyes
    stitch me shut

    puppets aren't always cloth and wood
    sometimes they are bone and flesh
    but in the end they all confess
    to the gross and gratuitous good
    i was her toy and yes
    i did what i could, not what i should
    and became paralyzed






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    ClearlySays commented on paralyzed

    01-24-2011

    You wouldn't believe how many friends I've seen take the same path. I've lost friendships trying to show people how they had lost themselves.

    Crush

    01/24/2011

    i too have lost friends....maybe saying too much to save someone from themselves. i have made MY mistakes, now i allow others to make them too, as painful as it is to watch. thank you for your time !

    cheronld commented on paralyzed

    07-06-2010

    Wow.....I can so relate to this write.....I lost myself once to someone else....it took longer than the relationship to get me back...very well written my friend....Cher

    frog commented on paralyzed

    06-10-2010

    This poem gave me the chills. Your wisdom and soul searching really come out in this one.

    hjaycarney commented on paralyzed

    04-29-2010

    "stitch me shut" is a wonderful phrase. very well written.

    ginga commented on paralyzed

    11-19-2009

    Crush, A poem that picks at my heartstrings knowing how puppets are taken hostage in a world of often evil humans. ginga

    Crush

    04/05/2010

    that u ginga...i really appreciate your attention to this.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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    low 19
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