Part of the List

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Part of the List

Part of the list

 

You haunt me

Your skin on my back

I carry your flesh inside of my flesh

Bone of my bone

My hair draped over your shoulders

My legs wrapped around your waist

Your mouth painting pictures on my mouth

Ghost…

Vanish from my body so that I may find rest when the moon kisses the sky

Death won’t erase your memory

And life exist empty without you

I don’t have your heart so mine won’t beat

I can’t breathe

Your eyes your lips your hips your kiss serenaded me when comfort couldn't and wouldn't come

Now they are all a part of the list of memories that haunt me

Just a part of the list


 

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shallenemcgrath commented on Part of the List

01-20-2011

This is really cool... the pic you have with this is frightening. I love that you are a ghost but the other is haunting you... it is a crazy idea. I wish you would write more metaphor into it. keep the reader guessing -this idea has such great potential... there is a whole ream of reasons this should be longer (which I don't often say about poems) At first I looked at the list as a legacy that you were carrying in your flesh and bones, like it was passed on to you by ancestors... And that you breathe only when their heart beats within you- Its crazy but I love this. Be careful... I am getting jealous of this idea, I might borrow it. :-)

blvdobd2009

01/20/2011

by all means plz run with it! I just want to first say how truly grateful I am firer your complete honesty....I need that criticism...it just breathes life into me...I honestly agree it should have been longer...the person who once occupied my heart that I speak of here can find a way to dominate my thoughts so I had tip abandon this work lol! your words were such a blessing

shallenemcgrath

01/23/2011

You are the blessing BlvdDreams... You have true talent.

Chaos128 commented on Part of the List

01-19-2011

Very affecting, B. It's a paradox the way "ghosts" are the only things that become more obvious the more you try to ignore them.

blvdobd2009

01/19/2011

Gosh I swear, sometimes I feel like you are like opening my head and reading my mind, Chaos it is so hard to ignore these feelings, especially when you know that those very ones are not and never will be reciprocated...

irielove commented on Part of the List

01-19-2011

very good pace, i felt like i was in an action movie with a twist of horror, i enjoyed it. Definatly got my sences awake!

blvdobd2009

01/19/2011

Wow! I just wanted to say thank you...It always means so much to get criticism on my work and feelings...I am forever grateful

blvdobd2009 commented on Part of the List

01-19-2011

This is a tribute to Ne-Yo and also dedicated to the one who got away...

JonTalbain

04/23/2013

Whomever he is, I am sure he knows how strongly you feel and to hope that love should bridge you two again.

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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