Pinball Screams

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    Pinball Screams

    I listen to her strangled scream,
    they pounce about through my mind,
    like lights flashing, erratic, on a pinball machine
    in a hazy pub off in Nowhere Carolina.
    That smile tries to lie its way out,
    but those blue eyes, those tortured blue eyes,
    they fail to deceive.
    They give her away, they blow her cover,
    with such grace and such ease.
    Those "No, I'm fine's"
    and the "I'm only tired's"
    along with many "I ate before I came's"
    may fool you again, 
    but I know those excuses
    too goddamn well. 

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    speechless commented on Pinball Screams

    04-24-2011

    another great write. your descriptive ability is amazing. you allow the reader to do more than just read, but to feel what you are trying to express.

    brokenhearted11

    04/24/2011

    I guess I work for that, but I get good compliments about it. I know I like description, so I use it a lot. I feel like I use too many adjectives and adverbs sometimes, but I guess that's just me. Thanks!!

    bluewolf commented on Pinball Screams

    03-23-2011

    This brings to mind the movie The Accused, a move starring Jodie Foster from several years ago.

    brokenhearted11

    03/23/2011

    I've never seen it, but if I get the chance I will. Thanks for reading.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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