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    This is one of the dreams that has haunted me. I drempt that my father acted as if he was helping my sick brother but in turn ended up beating him. In my dream I sat and held my younger brother, rocking him as i watched his face swell up and bruse due to my father causing him physical harm. My father did not really do any of this, its simply a dream that haunts me.

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    Curiosity
    Inflection of pain
    A helpful hand turned evil
    A man younger than me
    Hurt by the being that made him
    Stronger than him, older and more powerful
    Tears become me
    To see such an ailment
    Heartache
    Fear
    My beloved brother
    Our father, our name sake
    Has harmed us

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    HarverTomsson commented on Question

    01-18-2011

    This one has more layers thatn a tree has rings. Is this anxiety release or whish fulfillment. Only your subconcious knows. Harv
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    Musicmynded1 commented on Question

    01-18-2011

    Sad... but very well penned Nebraska.. very well penned indeed.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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