"Night of the Snow Moth"

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Well, here's my latest completed poem. It involves a fable, one I discovered upon a spot of research after its completion, weird. It's very loosely based on a childhood experience in the NE. It was originally going to be six verses, but it needed a seventh to smooth an awkward transition area. I hope everyone truly enjoys this - it was an absolute blast to write!

"Night of the Snow Moth"



On a dormant winter eve far ago
Early winter, after a snowstorm blew
As the lands slept in their icy white glow
I felt displaced, should've been sleeping too.

Awake, and no one else, nor the season
And so vast and radiant was the night
And with that, I needed no more reason
Out I went into the snowbound moonlight.


The air, the chill night air of the unknown
I smelled a fence in its indigo sleeve
I breathed in the pines, hemlocks, all alone
I felt more than I ever dreamt that eve.

Just a tranquil night midst the frozen seas
The watching moon, a shooting star surpassed
The stately state of the icebreaker trees
The only proof the winters ever passed.


Deeper into the flourescent forest
As I battled back a forbidden sense
Some ways further, well far enough I guessed
Almost lost in the drifts and monuments.

A blue rose nodded far off in the snow
There in the white sky that blue cloud fluttered
There it fluttered and declared itself aglow
I laughed, we laughed, and we never wilted.

As the winds went blustering by that eve
Again I could not stay, only God knew
As I wandered back, forgetting the leave
And then I remembered, the snows dream too.



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stellar commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

10-19-2009

Reading this one makes me want to switch that view of this moth to mine just for a moment just to enjoy what he sees...You always perfectly captured the atmosphere...Love this one so much

angel3337 commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-11-2009

Inspiring, captivating the mind and the soul, painting a beautiful enchanted night.~

Stardrift

09/13/2009

Thanks Angel! I took a cue or two from Frost on that one.

Hampton commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-09-2009

I like this pem very much. Your words softly capture the moment and draw the reader into the forest.

Stardrift

09/09/2009

Thankyou, Hamps! And I commented on your recent moth write - pensive btw! Ty again.

danmartyjake1 commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-01-2009

Words that caress with so much feeling and genuineness. Truly a pleasure to read you.

Stardrift

09/02/2009

Ty again! That one started out as a complete mess - I'm surprised it came out quite so good. Ty very much, Danmar (?)! I really don't wanna write that whole name out, lol!!

WinterFrost commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

08-17-2009

Very nice poem. Love the visuals yours, Winter

Stardrift

08/17/2009

Hey, thanks, WF! Visuals are very important to me, I probably should've been a painter, or maybe I was one! Ty.

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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