"The Maniac Part 1"

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    • TheAngelOfDeath
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    This poem is part 1 of my new series.
    It is a look inside the mind of a maniac.
    (me) lol Just kidding
     
    But anyway I love Feed Back let me know what you think.

    Your Friend and fellow poet
    Grim

    "The Maniac Part 1"

    "The Maniac Part 1"


    "Let me Out!"
    "Why do you keep me in here!"
    ..He says..

    Yet he is only pleading with the guards for a chance to slit their throats
    The strait jacket and the Padded room aren't enough to hide his intent to kill or the blood lust in his eyes.

    "Please...I swear I'm OK now.."
    ..He says..

    But in the back of his mind he is picturing how he will murder them

    "The Drugs...They Worked!"
    "I Feel So..Great!"
    ..He says..

    Yet he hides the pills they give him under his tongue, and awaits his chance to attack patiently
    ......
    He smiles while trying to hold back the twitch caused by his need to kill
    ......
    ..Then..
    ~BOOM~
    The door to his cell was slammed shut right before he was going to make his move!
    ..His feeding time was over..
    ..Now he would have to wait till lunch time to try again..


    A poem by: TheAngelOfDeath

     

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    melanie23 commented on "The Maniac Part 1"

    08-26-2009

    ok im hooked, lol. i wont be able to pull away until the end. i have to know. great job. captivating.

    sammia commented on "The Maniac Part 1"

    07-30-2009

    i was on the edge of my seat waiting to readthe next line and cant wait to read the next part.

    FiloRozzell commented on "The Maniac Part 1"

    07-29-2009

    Sounds like the beginning of a movie...Can't read the next six

    soulwriter commented on "The Maniac Part 1"

    07-28-2009

    I am a most fortunate one, for I know that though the door just closed, more chapters have already been opened and I can read on... for the moment though - intensity has tantalized my senses. Onward I crawl --- most excellent job on pulling me into a world that I would have avoided for a cell does not suite me!

    am2anangel commented on "The Maniac Part 1"

    07-27-2009

    Great job very realistic and visually intense. The format and flow both nicely done. Looking forward to next 5 parts.

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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