"Torn"

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Get out your dictionaries lol.

"Torn"

Torn

 

Torn between two worlds, I’m my own paradox.

The anomaly that boggles me, alone where it stops…

in an unknown direction, bottoms up over the top.

I’m elevated when it lifts, but deposed when it drops.

 

My focus has stopped.

 

Wandering blind or blindly I wander…

I wonder, about the stars I’m under. I ponder…

My mind is asunder over the thunder I squander…

Many moons and plunder the summer, I’m fonder…

 

no longer of the good which you honor.

 

Torn between two worlds, I’m my own mystery.

An enigmatic fabric puzzles my extrasensory…

perception of this unaesthetic attic which is me

Externally pragmatic antics mask costly thoughts which enter free.

 

Essentially…it’s just a mental fee.

 

Elaborate varied vocabulary makes my tactics carry…

extravagant capillaries I can bury with lack of very…

adamant acts of expansionary stays, the facts are nary…

aberrant. A serried basilary should keep my actions merry…

 

or at least be the basis for strategic acts of parry.








© 2008-2009 Malik Peterson. All Rights Reserved.

 

 

 

 


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Jlarue commented on "Torn"

01-13-2010

this was very good..this made me think..the way in which u manipulated the words to flow as they did is wild..this is wats up

MalikPeterson

01/29/2010

Thanks J...I am glad you liked it...and appreciate you stopping by and saying so.

blanket commented on "Torn"

12-28-2009

as if I needed to....not going to rate because the contest is past. Gratz on winning. Beginning to think....well, nvm. That will be between us, in email. Not for posting here. This is awesome as usual though, sorry I missed it. It was around the time I was in the hospital though. But....you know me, I'm looking back.

MalikPeterson

12/31/2009

Thanks blankster...I hope all is well with you currently :)

victoria1982 commented on "Torn"

12-20-2009

Nice poem malik I really did enjoy reading it. I understood it a lot.It was a nice well deserved poem. CONGRATULATIONS

MalikPeterson

12/21/2009

Thanks for the congrats victoria...I really appreciate that and your comments :)

Teardrops commented on "Torn"

12-16-2009

well writtern poem with alot of feeling and great flow and good read

MalikPeterson

12/21/2009

Thank you so much.

RJK commented on "Torn"

12-16-2009

Very thoughtful reflec on ones self. I know I took a look around in me. I've wanderd in and out of their and you put a mental pitchur to that place. Well done.

MalikPeterson

12/21/2009

Thanks...glad you liked it...I appreciate your time and your comments.

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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