Rappin It Up

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    'My attempt at rapping. I almost hesitate to post this because it's only an emulation and not the real thing. Especially since the angst isn't resident within me. (Well, for the most part anyway.)

    Rappin It Up

     RAPPIN IT UP

    Common ground
    Dividing up time into meaningful sections;
    Each ones eyes in the other reflected
    Looking for good - while the wind of the ego
    Sits still and disconnected
    Let the dawn have the day. And open hearts do the talking
    Gotta be the heart cause the mind would be rockin
    Thoughts have wings and the devil has things
    And the river has the cure that the treetops whisper
    But the clock's tick-toc-n
    And the world's infected
    Wisdom's in the dust and it's totally disrespected

    The mind of a thief is a cruel defender
    Matched only by the killer with a smooth agenda
    He would make it Hollywood?
    Would he know to top spin it?
    Would a day be a day if he didn't share the pain in it?

    Street's a living scream, forget about agenda
    American dream for the victum and the lender
    Life's for in betweens we can fly the flag forever
    So do we quit now? Some do but some never.
    Some just look for common ground.

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    MrGee commented on Rappin It Up

    03-19-2010

    Obviously your talent and ability to write knows no bounds. or should I say has no bounds? lol anyway, I cannot help but comment on the excellent rhythmn of the poem and the use of the metaphor. a 10 from me
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    NevillePark

    03/20/2010

    Thank you from the bottom of my Continental Shelf, my seafaring friend.

    Teardrops commented on Rappin It Up

    03-16-2010

    You see things in life and nature that songs writters sing of great poem truly the talent shows Marie
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    NevillePark

    03/20/2010

    Thanx Marie - - well, truth be told, it was songs I've been writing almost exclusively on and off over the last 28 years. I used to write poems when I was 12. I remember someone tutoring me somewhere and giving me all those old English words to use. Betwixed, shant, and several others I can't hope to remember. All I knew at the time was that this was the only way to write REAL poetry.

    Bettysrainbow48 commented on Rappin It Up

    03-14-2010

    You sure did put a lot of work into this poem. You have talent.
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    NevillePark

    03/16/2010

    Thank Bett. I like to really stretch myself when I write.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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