Real

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Real

It's been so long
Nine long months without you
Do you still think of me like that
I know I do on occasion
It was not a permanent thing
I knew this going in
But it was real
Your lips to mine
Real
Your hands running on my sides
Real
You throwing me to the wall
Real
That time on the lake
Where no one would see
Real
The first time in your room
The dogs snoring in the corner
You were so gentle but so feral
You and I that moment...
Real
Last summer I made you a man
You brought me out of my shell
Last summer you showed me I am liked
Last summer was so...
Real
I know we broke it off
I have another looking at me
But they are so far
And you merely a block away
What we did last summer was good
What we did was fun
What we did felt right
Are you up for another run?
Because everthing seems so...
Surreal

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Iliketoflyaway commented on Real

08-09-2012

yep! know this feeling but this one sounds like my high school years.

shywoodrose commented on Real

06-24-2012

"You were so gentle but so feral", Excellent line!! Very realistic

Kingwebstar commented on Real

06-04-2012

Excellent poem I will read lots more of your work. Keep writing and you have my support. Love Da King

Poetesshanna commented on Real

05-29-2012

Great write. You have a great catch at the beginning that got me hooked. I really liked the way you spaced lines with just the word "real". It drove your point home.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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