reality dreams.

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    reality dreams.

    Exposure. Tingle. Toss. Stretch.

     

    Mumble. Sigh. Turn to Caress.

     

    Legs. Weight. Neck & Breath.

     

    Smile in sleep. Our scene is set.

     

    Snooze. Touch. Light & Sweet.

     

    Morning. Eyes. Stare at Me.

     

    Look & Lay. Down to See.

     

    Arms. Around. All Night to Sleep.

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    feldmarschal commented on reality dreams.

    03-03-2011

    You've got very nice polyrhythyms here, sweetheart! this is very good! the breaks that you have in the middle here, are called caesuras, and are wholly appropriate for the short line lengths that you have chosen. You defiitely "get it", honey; in that you understand that poetry is MUCH MORE than just words... but also about DEVICES1 yOU USE THESE OTHER DEVICES VERY WELL...You are very talented, young lady! I will continue to look over your pieces.
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    AlysonAlive

    03/03/2011

    Oh, good! There's a name for them! (: Caesura. I love it. Thank you very much. I'm glad to have a new follower. ♥

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