REMEMBER

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    REMEMBER





    I try again...
    ....... To put it together,
    I don't feel it.......
    ...... The emotion is weaker!


    I think ......
    I'll dream............
    .......... Be restless
    ........ Remember!
    You left me breathless!


    ................... It all fades,

                             .............In to a scrambled mess

    All
    .....T.....I.....E
            W....ST.....D               P!!
    U..


    So the whisper
    ......
    I hear in the wind...........
    ..............Becomes a memory!
    ...........That just wont end!


    I love you!
    Is all I heard!
    I guess its true!

    Love is deserved!

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    viejay04 commented on REMEMBER

    03-09-2010

    You're very creative, Red! Even the structure of your poem really captures the emotion! Keep it up! Looking forward for more! Love and peace- viejay04 ^_^

    redbloodink

    03/09/2010

    ty for your thoughts and comments on my writing.....

    dawnjyc commented on REMEMBER

    02-26-2010

    Oh I really like this. A choice to ignore the emotion and instead remember what was last heard...twisted up inside-YES. Love is deserved. Nicely done.

    redbloodink

    02/26/2010

    ty Dawn for the loving comment

    MarionYost commented on REMEMBER

    02-25-2010

    Once again Red, Nicely done. I love your style! Keep it up sweetie! All the best -Marion-

    redbloodink

    02/25/2010

    awe ty Marion....... I will.... you better keep writing as well.....

    Jericho1621 commented on REMEMBER

    02-25-2010

    I can feel the emotion in this.. Very strong. Love is a tricky game to play.. But if you want to play, sometimes you have to lose.

    redbloodink

    02/25/2010

    how true Jericho.... ty for the comment and reading my work......

    TCpoeboy commented on REMEMBER

    02-25-2010

    Your display and choice of characters put the energy in your write. U describe the return of something as precious as love!

    redbloodink

    02/25/2010

    I'm glad it came across like that Tc ty for the feed back!

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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