Richter I

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Richter I

The ardency inwhich you have caused
Has brought forth an insufferable malady
Every laceration weeps in lucid shambles

In my labryinth
Carnage breeches my soul
Bete Naire, fills the twinging heat within me
Weak and naked to your words I plunge

Forever deny what could have prevailed
Your inadequacies shame mortal essence
My fervent survival now tainted
With your redolence

Wallowing in my unknown zenith
Incandescence lambency parades the boulevard
Asesnt from you, therefore I depart

Hence I will revive

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Musicmynded1 commented on Richter I

01-18-2011

Things like these Are meant to be caught in the moment.. I love this just the way u said it.

devaamido commented on Richter I

02-01-2010

I'm not gonna rate either of the Richter poems. I could be wrong but I feel as if you may still be too caught up in the energies of the relationship to allow you to say clearly what you want to communicate. I'd rewrite it in about 6 months.

irielove

02/15/2010

this is how i truly felt at the moment i wrote it, it was from a previous relationship but it is still one of my favorit poem, i know in 6months i wouldnt feel the same, it was just an 'in the moment' thing *smiles*

emilytwain commented on Richter I

01-29-2010

to end this w/ "hence i will revive" was poetic genius. gave me chills...write on

RunningAway007 commented on Richter I

01-29-2010

wow i really like your poem! its kinda dark, but yet not so much! keep writing i love it!

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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