Roberts eyes light up

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Never traveled that far Midwest but, have been looking forward to it.

Roberts eyes light up

Well, only 8 more days before the ride

which I look forward with much anticapation

my eyes will roam some Midwest plains

sites never seen before in this life for me

 some pain....oh my aching butt, this 30 hour ride

but, what a sight for sore eyes you will be

after I reach my destiny.




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carynontherhine commented on Roberts eyes light up

08-14-2010

I like this write! Leaves the reader of what will happen when Robert reaches his destiny. thirty hour ride, on a bus? I like the open stanza. Seems as though something big or special is going to happen once he reaches the end. I like it. A perfect ten!

Paint1954

08/14/2010

Thank you and this is really going to happen when I get to see Robert for the very first time. smile

Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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