Rose/Sins

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Rose/Sins

I am sorry that you had to see me like this,
covered in the blood of my enemies,
My pale flower, my sweet Rose,
You are who has been burdened by my sins,
Sins in which innocent lives were taken,
My beautiful Rose,
Will you forgive me for it?
Forgiveme for the pain I have caused.
You are my sole light
In this harsh reality.

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rougepriest commented on Rose/Sins

10-27-2009

a simple plea nicely said, lacks the power it might have, were it worded a bit more dramatically. A huge story played a little too simply. think of all that had to happen for murder to occur, the poem reflects a small portion of the emotion that would be present, just my opinion. still ok though

HopeOhlarik commented on Rose/Sins

10-27-2009

nicely done. a dark cry for help, i have those too.

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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