Sea of Lies

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This poem is fairly obvious about what it's about. I wanted to talk about how people lie to themselves. In this case, the girl did, but it has it's twist, In a sick way the man cares that she's hurt but the poem never states who the man is.. Perhaps a lost love? maybe somebody who hurt her.... either way, the girl ends up killing herself.. another topic I wanted to get into. I wanted to show how people do the worst things when they're led by emotions.. especially sadness, anger, etc. In this case, it was sadness that drove her over the edge.

Sea of Lies

A young woman, she tries and tries
to believe every single word
All of them, a sea of lies
something she's always heard

A young man stands alone
listens as she cries
he now knows he's alone
as she slowly but surely dies

Quietly the sad girl fades away
to a place to be alone
standing in place, the man will stay
he'll never hear the phone

day by day, the sad girl tries
to continue her lonely life
remembering that awful sea of lies
and how she's not his wife

The night comes in, the day goes out
and there's nothing worth to try
she loses what's left of her doubt
and decides she now must die

here she sits, alone in the dark
it is here she still cries
death once rang in this park
 when she heard her sea of lies

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sk commented on Sea of Lies

10-12-2009

Ever hear the phrase, "The best revenge is living well"? That's the motto I believe in. The thing about suicide is that, time does indeed ease pains and change persepectives (especially if you're a young person), once you've 'made the jump' and killed yourself...things will NEVER get better...life goes on, Christmases, birthdays, beautiful Summers, all keep coming, and you don't get even the tiniest bit of joy because you're still DEAD...a permanent solution to a temporary problem...your writing is deep and vivid....the pain is palpable. Keep it up.

Chaos128 commented on Sea of Lies

10-07-2009

Strategy first, then tactics! A "Sea of Lies" will surely poison us if we just stand in it and take no action. When one finds him/herself in a toxic situation, it is incumbent upon him/her to remove themselves from it, regardless of how much they have invested in it - Why throw good "assets" after bad. Anyway, that's what I got out of it. high marks from me!

Mrpoetry commented on Sea of Lies

10-02-2009

keep writing venom, your words flow like a river..

iattractmoney commented on Sea of Lies

10-01-2009

A heart Felt poem it shows how lies affect ones life thats why I believe in honesty Charlie iattractmoney

Venom637

10/01/2009

Thank you very much. I'm glad it expresses exactly what I was hoping it would. I wanted to show exactly how a lie can totally alter a life.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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