Shaky Hands

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This is a poem/song that I wrote the other night. It portrays a relationship as a work of art where the partners are bad artists and not meant to be. I hope you enjoy it.

Shaky Hands

Leave me behind, and you'll remain right at the start.
Tired of rest, and trying to find my mind.
The man above lost my faith when I lost your heart.
Do you feel safe hiding from the dangers of this love?

Beautiful brush no longer steadied by our hands.
Our work of art was nothing but counterfeit.

Life is a breeze with some alcohol and pills.
The world spins, when my mind is at ease.
Trying to hesitate, but the thought gives me the chills.
Guess I should move on, but for you I'd rather wait.

Beautiful brush no longer steadied by our hands.
Our work of art was nothing but counterfeit.

I believe our masterpiece was the love we never had,
we had to much canvas, and to little paint.

Beautiful brush no longer steadied by our hands.
Our work of art was nothing but counterfeit.

I believe our rough drafts were the best we ever had,
proofread and edited grew our love so faint.

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sanctus commented on Shaky Hands

02-21-2011

Compelling read. Nicely constructed.......................

andy2103

02/22/2011

Thanks, I tend to write songs more than poems, but I try to make the songs as poetic as possible... sometimes it can be quite tough. :)

jeanpnkldyg commented on Shaky Hands

02-21-2011

It does take a steady hand to create a masterpiece of love and lots of paint! Glad to have you here!

andy2103

02/22/2011

Yes, sometimes creating a masterpiece of love is too exhausting! lol, thanks for the welcome, glad to be here!

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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