Silence

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     This peice came into form at the tender age of 13. It has a beautiful melody that fits it perfect.

    Silence

       Silence like the night it surrounds me, and the lonely chills me to the core. The love that once was can't be and the warmth I had is no more.

    Take these chains from my heart, let me love some. I can't live like this anymore the past is over and done with but the lonely chills me to the core.

    My soul is a hollow dark shadow behind this smile is a tear, I wear this face for someone but that someone brings out my fear.

    But in the silence of the night that surrounds me it  all becomes crystal clear ......




                                                              Deni LeMar
                                                                           1975

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    gogant commented on Silence

    10-23-2009

    You must have had a schoolgirl crush on one of those fickle schoolboys back there in the 8th grade...................haven't we all.............................................g
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    deni2u

    10/23/2009

    It was the 7th grade and he wasnt even a boyfriend go figure that just wanted him to be I was a lonely child from start and probabely to finish even around the people that I love.

    Marsink commented on Silence

    10-19-2009

    It's hard to believe that this is from 13; I couldn't put together a coherent sentence at that age. Excellence abounds in this piece
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    Russ commented on Silence

    10-11-2009

    Another excelent write. I would love to hear this put to music. Thank you.
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    deni2u

    10/11/2009

    thank you after I read your comment I did pick up my guitar and play it

    nonners commented on Silence

    10-11-2009

    going through this right now-great read felt every line
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    deni2u

    10/11/2009

    well your response to me is just as moving as the words i wrote so many years ago im new at this but im on my way

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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