Sly Moon Sibilants


  • Fantasy

    Poem Commentary

    Sometimes a fantasy tells the truth the best.

    Sly Moon Sibilants

    Tonight I heard the stars call out,

    And though I thought the moon was deaf,

    It answered back in sly sibilants,

    Catcalls from some forgotten cleft.


    There the protoplanetary disc,

    There the rainbow turbid cloud,

    Caught in Messier forty-two,

    Spoke as if they called out loud.


    Looked askance, the sun was gaining,

    And I was trapped in endless track,

    Yet, through a misbegotten winter’s frost,

    I saw spring, March has no turning back.


    She glowed at me, with eyes afire,

    Passion, love, and earthy gaze

    Her neck, a-tilt, betrayed desire

    Watch, just how her neck scarf lays.


    Melting choc’late, slow and sweet,

    I’m lost somewhere inside their flame,

    Such a sweet and sudden drowning,

    My bubbles rise to chant her name.


    She was always framed in silk,

    Aglow on blue hued satin sheets,

    Her pink and white light up the night

    Where braille and signing meets.


    There were those tender offered treats,

    Sweet, yet sugarless confections,

    All lips, and tips, and smooth skin trips,

    Where lovers make connections.


    One zany, rainy afternoon,

    I chased her through a warm cloud spray,

    We biked until our clothes peeled off,

    Just one less thing found in the way.


    There somewhere between the sibilants,

    Came gasping pulchritude in kisses,

    When long before the summer’s end,

    The star-eyed silph became a missus.

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    Hampton commented on Sly Moon Sibilants


    Sly hissing sounds trapped in ones imagination form the backdrop for this excellent write.

    cousinsoren commented on Sly Moon Sibilants


    This is a classic romance poem for me. there is conceit, or a layer of hiddenness, but there are clues to follow to defendable conclusions. the moon has long been associated with affecting the emotional life of human kind, especially toward expressions of love. I simply had the stars as primary instigators. Sibilants abound in romance- sssleep, kissessss, ssssoft, ssssexy, romanzzz, ssssspring, you get the idea, just check out all the S, sh, or z sounds in the story. Most of the details in this story poem had a mirror in reality- back in the day." Harver, you have written my comment for me...............LOL To it, I must had that your poem, in my estimation, is an excellent model of surrealistic phantasma.. My rating for all-round poetic perfection and conceits is 10x10+



    Whew! Phantasma, huh? OK by me.

    Chaos128 commented on Sly Moon Sibilants


    Heavenly bodies have their secrets, and though they might be reticent about sharing them, it seems they're occasionally willing to let slip a clue or two.



    Yeah, but it helps when you stay out late at night once in a while. That's when secrets come out. Thanks for dropping by for a read.

    wheelsal commented on Sly Moon Sibilants


    I will never see March the same again. I love the underlying reality of probable experience, but left with the mystery of how and why. Your use of sound and perfect words are who you are. I've missed your poetry and you. You have always stimulated my brain. A friend, Sally



    thanks, sally, I've thought of you from time to time and wanted to get back with you about a visit including mywife. that may indeed happen, but not too probable on any week day. Her schedule and mine run opposite until Saturday, when we more or less mesh for a few hours. Really, your best shot to catch us together is then, and usally at or near church. this Saturday is cassarole fellowship day. Bring anything vegetarain and feel at home, or just come and let us feed you. I will be speaking on the Christian disciple's most important habit for success. On another note, look up Mary's and join the website. Like OP but without any Competition, mmore of a social place for writers, artists, and musicians. You'll find many familiar faces from OP. My new work is there. It actually goes way back to some OP listings that I removed many months ago. Plus a certifiable new poem or two. Harv



    Your invite is so tempting, but tied up for next few weeks with family visits, recital and weddings. Glad life is busy, but miss my friends. Thanks for feedback and will keep in touch.

    Olan01 commented on Sly Moon Sibilants


    Wonderful, imaginative and mystical poetry. Reminds me of coyotes howling at the moon and cats hissing at things unseen. Silph is a good word reminding me of angels and the Brown Mountain Lights or the lights in Norway.



    Let the poem take you on your journey! I commented where it took me while writing it. Thanks for the read, and taking time to comment. HT



    We poor our emotions and heart in a poem and have a deep understanding of our intent as how it will effect others emotionally. Then they read and come to their own conclusions and find their on meaning. My poetry teacher in college said that we own the poem only for the moment and once we allow others to read it; we release our control and ownership, for now; it belongs to the world.

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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