smack me in the head done

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    smack me in the head done
    I sank deeper
    de
    ep er
    in the pain PAIN!

    could not would not see what
    you have had
    done you did
    do
    but now now I know unblind I see can see
    do see
    shut eyes open W I D E
    and
    I am free,
    freely free, Amen! free
    M-hmm, oh yeah, bless it free!

    I am AM

    done.


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    BluesPreacher commented on smack me in the head done

    05-14-2009

    Love the title."smack me in the head done"
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    Stark commented on smack me in the head done

    04-27-2009

    Interesting. I like that you feel free to play with words the way you do in this poem; so many people think poetry has to sound like prose, only prettier. I've never actually seen anyone break a word up the way you did "deeper" either...not sure if I like that, but it's certainly interesting.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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