SnowfLAkes

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SnowfLAkes

The statement you scrawled in snow

upon my bonnet stuck for a good few miles.

Until an uphill straight caused your escrow

to flake in perfect intervals,

and vanish into the hills like ashes from an urn.

 

First the L, then the A. Last,

the heart splintered into an air that thinned the skins

of Twyford trees and of us- cast

out to a disappointed sorrow in your eyes

and a lost-lamb look to see if I could stretch my skills

 

to catch the sugary frostlets at the wheel,

and reconstruct our pairing like Roman tiles.

Instead, I thawed the icicles of your ordeal

by remarking that our love was now eternal,

fostered by Mother Nature to return

 

on a day like this each and every year.

It would fall just as December begins

and blanket us as if to ensure we still cohere.

What’s more, it’d still descend from those skies

long after our ashes had settled together in the hills.

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MindNumbing commented on SnowfLAkes

01-27-2011

I've never before heard the words "I'll love you forever" so exquisitely expressed in my life. This is beautiful, Arron.

LenaM commented on SnowfLAkes

12-31-2010

Arron I'm spellbound. You have painted so perfectly the intricacies of snowflakes and this line is exquisite !! What’s more, it’d still descend from those skies long after our ashes had settled together in the hills.

arronpalmer

01/04/2011

Thank you so much, I thought that line would wrap it up rather nicely. Thanks :)

LenaM

01/04/2011

It's the perfect ending :)

ginga commented on SnowfLAkes

12-31-2010

Arron, I am mesmerized, and stymied by the poignancy of a poem that provokes so much emotion and written so beautifully with attention to each and every detail. This is poetic perfection within the complicated design of a snowflake. I am going to the Forums and pitching that poets read this one. Pure elegance. ginga

arronpalmer

01/04/2011

I cannot thank you enough for Buzzing this. This is one of my own personal favs of my work, should I be allowed, so thank you for appreciating this. It really means a lot Ginga.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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