SOILED

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  • queenrosered
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Other poet friends have read this and asked me to continue this "story", as they are intrigued. What are your thoughts on that?Leave it, or write a second poem to go with it? Thanks. Appreciate comments and ratings. I will always return the favor.

SOILED

"Pure as the driven snows" folks said;

 A phrase that now drummed in her head.

 As she walked in awful pain and dread

 With crimson droplets, virgin red.

 

 Once marked for church, a bride for Christ

 A violent rape has changed her life.

 Two weapons bared, one flesh, one knife;

 Dead either way, gone is soul's light.

 

 The air was cold down to the bone

 She felt it not, trudged on alone.

 Towards yon tower made of stone

 Hymen torn, young heart unsown.

 

 "There's only one thing I must do"

 She vowed through misty eyes of blue;

 As up those tower steps she flew

 And from the top, herself she threw.

 

 Now townfolk still speak of her name

 In quiet tones, of hush and shame;

 The hush for her, shame on the knave,

 Whose name she took with her to grave.

 

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Insideme commented on SOILED

01-22-2010

you are slowly becoming my favorite poet. Ive read the classics and have to say , you rate among even the best of the cannons of poetry.

queenrosered

02/16/2010

Thanks again, Inside! Sorry to take so long to get back to you, and I truly appreciate your comments! Having a little internet trouble but shall return the favor as soon as possible! Love, "Q" XD (what a marvelous compliment, wow, thanks again!)

SuperChick76 commented on SOILED

01-21-2010

Wow, that's a said story. Brilliantly written though. Good write.

queenrosered

01/21/2010

Thanks again Super, I definitely appreciate your time and your comments!! Peace and Love, Rose! XD

bjenkins commented on SOILED

01-21-2010

WOOOOOW!!!! Incredible job!! This is a deserate setting and haunting in a beeautiful case of wording!! very nicely done!!

queenrosered

01/21/2010

Thanks so much BJ!! Appreciate it!! Rose! XD

HeavenlyAngel commented on SOILED

01-21-2010

i have a write like this.. sad but very good write.

queenrosered

01/21/2010

Thanks so much for the read and the rate Angel, much appreciated! XD

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.