Some Peace

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Some Peace

I've been swimming,
In this ocean of confusion,
I've been drifting,
Blind for way too long...
All I see,
Are the images inside my mind,
I feel so weak,
Though I'm expected to be strong...

I can't stand the thoughts,
Gathering in my head,
It's hard to control,
The impulses I feel...
I'm suffocating slowly,
I can't take it anymore,
Is this all a dream,
Or is it real?

What if I acted on,
Each idea I had?
What would be,
A way I could be free?
If life is just a ride,
I feel like getting off,
All I really want,
Is just some peace...

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kochab commented on Some Peace

08-15-2009

I feel that the entire poem was very strong with the exception of the ending, but I also feel that perhaps could have been an intentional play done to show you done have the peace which you search for. In either regards you have a great thing going on here, dont doubt it.

laydbak1 commented on Some Peace

06-25-2009

Some torments must be faced with the anxiousness of a cornered rabbit staring into the sharp teeth of a pack of hounds at bay... They cannot be shut out, just closing our eyes... A good write...

kmooney commented on Some Peace

05-29-2009

Keli, this is a cool poem. I like it a lot. Really makes me stop and think. Good use of imagery. It's like I'm floating in the ocean one minute and on a carnival ride the next. I, too, have had similar feelings. Not sure what is real and what is illusion. There have been times that I was dreaming and it felt so real and other times that I just wished it was all just a dream. Very thought provoking. I really like your style. You are very talented. I know you read and commented on some

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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